Noranora30~35
Added 2019-11-02 03:21:16 +0000 UTC
thank you always. :)
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Shiro is so sweet <3
Phantasmas35
2020-05-23 15:43:26 +0000 UTCWow I`m so sorry for the late reply...! I just noticed this comment! thank you for the advice...!! helps me ALOT!!!!!!
NOMIFUKI
2019-12-15 05:09:25 +0000 UTCThat happens to me too! I’m so bad at counting pages... sorry! I will correct them!
NOMIFUKI
2019-11-09 01:50:41 +0000 UTCI think theres a bit of an error with the numbering. When I count all of these pages, theres only 33 pages unless Im missing something
Myokuju
2019-11-03 04:12:00 +0000 UTCAw, that was a cute moment. Nice work!
Hr. Seehund
2019-11-02 13:45:44 +0000 UTCAnother amazing set of pages! These are really good, been loving reading it. It's cute how there relationship is. It's really sweet how Shiro is trying to change aspects of himself for Kuro. Hoping there are more pages ahead! Though did notice a few minor grammatical errors in the pages. Page 30 It should be, "What's that.. smell? It's making me hungry Page 31 "Did I lose?" "Shit, I thought I was gonna win" "Your movement becomes really slow when you're insulted. It's super easy to beat you. (as beat off means to jerk him off) "Looks like some did the the dinner prep!" While not grammatically incorrect, the line "Then I shall go and prepare something for us to drink" sounds a bit stiff. I'd recommend altering it to, "Alright, I'll go get us something to drink"
Nekoitoi
2019-11-02 04:11:50 +0000 UTCShiro fidgeting is the best! 😅 とてもかわいい !
Torakuma
2019-11-02 04:04:28 +0000 UTCRedaunさん、ありがとうございます！日本語とても上手です！私も嬉しいです！ありがとうございます！
NOMIFUKI
2019-11-02 03:58:03 +0000 UTC私は日本語を勉強しているから、日本語のページと英語のは私を手伝っているんです。ありがとうございます！
Redaun Amarién
2019-11-02 03:50:38 +0000 UTC
