Unforgivable - a Loving Wives story

Been saving it till the Ch101 urge got too strong, So tonight it got a straight through, can't put it down, read. I've come out the far end still not entirely convinced that Wife number 1 doesn't suit a dress style with sleeves that tie at the back and wallpaper that runs to a high bulk, she's bonkers, devious, and manpulative

Excellent work. Fits the TSM polyamory theme and even gets in robots and rockets :)

Smart wombat

Half way through and hooked. I agree with Mick Peaper that your writing style is evident but would ad that it's normal and natural, though I also think your writing has gotten considerably better since the early TSM chapters, so kudos. Now, with Unforgivable, I don't normally go for fiction with intense interpersonal themes or family drama, but this is proving to be a compelling exception to my reading rules. ;-) Thanks for the bonus story! Quite keen to see where the story goes!

Trimtab

Hi Tefler loved the story thank you. Your style of writing showed through I would have known you wrote it.

Mick Peaper

Tefler has a theme that has popped up now in both TSM and now this: the main character tells the truth, or at least doesnt lie. John was always a truthful man, but now has a chorus of women in his mind so that the truth is always at the forefront. Likewise, the MC for "Unforgivable" highly values trust and truth, and plays the "honesty game" with Tamara. I think we gravitate towards such an ideal because to truly live in truth is to bear every burden life throws at you with humility and class. We lie to try and alter reality to fit our immediate needs. But someone who can live truthfully, despite the trials of life... well that's someone we can all strive to be. Its one of many reasons I look up to John and the girls so much!

I am also curious about your writing background

Tefler, I admit it took me a while to get into the story, but at some point I got totally hooked. This story -- along with TSM -- makes me wonder what kind of background you have personally. Your writing captures a particular dimension of life that is eerily accurate and that is what hooks me. It made me squirm several times. I still skim through some sections that appeal to me less, and the characters are a little more exaggerated in their emotions for my taste, but you've got an uncanny ability to capture some good stuff.

G E

I really enjoyed the new story, thanks for sharing it with us. While it wasn't one of my preferred genres, I found the characters to be engaging and despite the difficult start to the story the ending was nice.

Raymond Jeffries

That's no problem, it's a very different type of story. "Loving wives" stories tend to be very low on the imagination and escapism side, while focusing on negative emotions and confrontation. Sci-Fi tales are often the complete opposite to that. I'm glad you found happiness in your own relationship! :-)

Tefler

I’m trying to get into this new story, I really am. So far the writing itself is very well done. So far it just won’t grab my attention. Years ago I found out my wife was cheating on me, that started a very long dark period of my life. The reasons were what they were, and choose were made for better or for worse. But in the end I spent another 5 years living in a loveless marriage in name only. Sleeping in different rooms, text book example of a broken home. All my life I had heard the classic debate of get a divorce and raise kids the best you can in joint custody. Or stay together for the sake of the children. After living one and seeing friends, family and coworkers go through the other. I can say with absolute truth. There is no right answer. Sorry if I am coming across as some bitter old man. Actually nothing could be further from the truth. Time passed I healed and wised up in many ways. One day the time was right , fate intervened and I found a truly amazing lady when I did not even realize I was looking for one. The new relationship was so much more fulfilling on every level than my previous one. Kind of funny how someone could spend so much time mourning what they thought was a irreplaceable. Only to later learn they didn’t even understand what such a thing was capable of. Tefler please do not take this a negative criticism of your writing in anyway. It is not. I’m just saying this one has yet to suck me in. Normally I read your chapters beginning to end straight through in an hour or two. I’ve been working on this one for 2days and not even a third of the way through. I seriously respect your writing and see great genius in your characters. Reading this story does not bring up painful memories or take me back to a dark time, nothing like that. My life is so much better now than it ever was, promise. I guess for me, reading this story is more like reading a tech manual for work. Cold and distant just absorbing the fact. Rather than the normal imaginative journey and escape from reality that I normal find in your story.

MJHSharkbait365

WOW...quite a story...especially the ending! Thanks!

Arrowglass

jesus this story was an emotional rollercoaster. you had a great balance of Seriously sympathy with all the characters, and told a beautiful tale of love and conflict. Tefler, please keep writing

Nathos

I just got through this one. It was a lovely read and had plenty of uncertainty and conflict. I was waiting for things to go further wrong and get darker, but it was a more pleasant read with the lighter path that it took! Thanks for sharing, Tefler!

Donovan Gibson

Thanks very much for letting me know about those typos, I've fixed them now. :-) Thanks for taking a gamble on the story even if it wasn't your usual genre of choice and I'm glad you enjoyed the story!

Tefler

Glad to see I'm not the only one who found this story resonating with my own true life one in some degree. Not usually what I read for that very reason, but a great story very well written nonetheless. Was happy to see that you got a wounded little bird in there and, just like in 3SM, her life was turned around so nicely :)

Well done sir. Very well done.

Florida Reader

Hell of a job Teffler, great story my friend!! Keep up the good work. Can't wait to see what happens in TSM chapter 101.

Tyler Poore

Tefler, it took a while but I finally got through it. A wonderful story and very well done! It is not a genre that I usually am interested in. I took a gamble because I love your writing. I am purely a Sci-Fi and Fantasy guy unless I am researching some History. More into an escape from current reality, rather than reading about people's problems in current reality, I guess. Anyway, I have to agree with Timbo's comments from yesterday about touching the heart strings, and JFLs comments about the emotional tones to being well done and reflecting a great deal of understanding of human psychology. I was glad Matt reconciled and forgave her, and it led to him getting even more happiness than a man could expect from life. My wife and I have known two couples for years, where either he, in one case, and she in the other case, cheated on their mates, and rather than divorce, they stayed together, and worked to save their marriage, and in both cases have ended up living long lives together, and seemingly have remained happy. I see forgiveness as although a tougher choice perhaps, can be a good choice. Thank you for the free story. In case your interested, I marked some typos I spotted from about page 85 on for you. As follows, excluding one that someone mentioned already, they are: Page 87 (top para, "…she finally (understand) the tremendous repercussions…"; page 102, 4th para, "…which (I done) quite a bit."; same page four lines down, "…attempt to hide (me) appreciation for her…"; page 105, top line, "…staring at (my) with wild eyes."; page 106, top line, "After a relaxing shower together, (I Tammy) started getting…."; page 144, half way down page, "…emotional pain as you've put me (though)…it's been even worse…; page 145, bottom para, "…I was expecting (it be) gorgeous."; page 155, top line, "She (produce) the plastic stick…''; page 161, third full paragraph down, "…following her cues, she (span) into my arms,…; page 168, about mid page, "…my arms around (me) slender young lover."; same page, five lines from bottom, "Just me, you and our baby." (I would suggest "Just you, me and our baby."); page 173, six lines down, "(How) hang on a minute!" Cheers!

Mmmm - kook count: 0.1%. That’s pretty low. 😉

Timbo

You do know he released this for free as a holiday project?

Hi Tefler, thanks for the story but I have tried several times to start reading it, but have failed to get more that a few pages in. As a story just does not seem to grab my attention. This is, however, no slight on your writing skills as i have noticed this with many other authors, that one story grabs me but others don't. Once again thanks, but because it doesn't grab me, I will not be cancelling my subscription. Cheers Mal

Dammit Tef, saw the Patreon notification just before bedtime, thought I'd take a quick look to see what an LW is - next thing I know it's 2am, my inner monologue is emotionally drained from yelling at Matt and I'm trying to guesstimate the cost of a round of whatever your favourite adult beverage is wherever it is you are... Take as many breaks from TSM as you need, I'd be heartbroken if TSM degenerated into a lifeless mash of connect-the-plot-points and filler. Do what you gotta do to keep the muse aflame!

Tefler, That is one of the best Loving Wives stories I've ever encountered. The characters were very rich indeed, and it was wonderful to see them grow through the pain and towards a restoration. You handled it so well that I think even the BTB crowd may not give you poor grades on Lit. Your final solution may even appeal to the swing crowd somewhat. So, you may achieve a really rare trifecta in LW-stories land...having everyone like the same story. About the only thing you didn't cover was a restoration of a relationship with the in-laws. Can you imagine the groveling involved from them for that to happen? In a way, Matt would've eventually had to agree that in a weird way, their actions actually helped them get to their fully reconciled state a bit quicker. So, there is reason to oddly be somewhat grateful for their interference/intervention. Enough to perhaps forgive them eventually too. Matt has shown himself to be a big enough man for that.

GrandPaM

Hey, I hope the story didn't catch you by surprise, and apologies for the tense evening. I should have made a point of more clearly spelling out the story content. :-( I'm glad you're feeling better after you finished reading it.

Tefler

Yeah it was a bit of a rollercoaster, but I wanted to try and have an upbeat ending for putting the reader through the wringer! I didn't want to write too much introspection from the husband, but those little sidebars were there to show his change of feelings from hate to forgiveness.

Tefler

Yeah, this kind of stuff would be too much of a downer in TSM, so it was nice to be able to find an outlet for those negative emotions! What does NTR stand for by the way?

Tefler

By all means let me with any problems you have with the logic. If I agree, I'm happy to make some changes. :-) The character's emotions are running rampant though, so they might not be acting all that logically!

Tefler

I think I mentioned before that it's much harder to write likeable characters than ones you hate, so it's tricky to get the balance right. Matt is a bit of a boyscout in this one, but that was intentional, because if I wrote him a bit more morally grey, then it would have put a different spin on the relationship with Tammy. Thanks for the compliments. :-)

Tefler

Thanks very much Anthony. I tried to write both characters as sympathetically as possible. Part of the reason I decided to write this was because chapter 100 was mostly lasers and missiles and I wanted to write about a bit of human drama. :-)

Tefler

I admit the ending was a little far-fetched, but I like a happy ending. :-) I tend to switch between RAAC and BTB depending on how the writer has portrayed the wife and her actions. If there's any kind of vindictiveness or disrespect shown by the cheaters, then I'm all for a nuclear response. :-) Stephanie in this made a series of bad mistakes, but she loved her husband throughout: 1) cheating because she was emotionally distraught about his depression. 2) letting herself be blackmailed because she was terrified he'd kill himself if he found out. 3) Not telling him the truth about Jake, because she knew it would destroy her future with him. I'm not justifying any of those, but at least her heart's mostly in the right place.

Tefler

Hey, sorry if I stirred up bad memories. Thanks very much for letting me know about the typos!

Tefler

Holy shit, this hit a little to close to home for comfort! My, but you have an incredible insight into the swirling whirlwind of emotions connected to adultery. It took me right back, and made for an awkward evening with my (then and now) wife. Feeling fine now, after I've finished reading it. It just goes to show how much your writing impacts your readers, I guess! Keep it up!

Wow and thank you. Finally had time to read this. You nailed the depth of emotion, anger, despair, hurt, at least in my personal experience. Really made the first part of the story hard to read for me, but thankfully rather cathartic. I’m a sucker for a happy ending and there were a few times that I thought it might not go well for Steph, so thanks for that, too. I loved the way Matt slowly came round. Felt very authentic. Your writing has a wonderful pacing and rhythm that just keeps me glued.

Wooh I like cheating stuff and NTR so I’m glad you release this . Such a great story. Actually, it better that you vent this type of story here since I don’t think it’d fit with3SM theme. But I’d also wanna see you try too lol

FRsinewave

This well written and creative take on the LW dilemma is another jewel from Tefler znd definitely worth the the delay in getting out TSM 101.

Actually, I found the emotional tones to be quite realistic and done with a great deal of understanding of human psychology. It was hard for me to read at times because this story hit me real life pretty square on. Very realistic about how I felt and currently feel as I dealt with similar issues over time. VERY well written and well done Tefler....very real. A few items you may want to look at: Organisation shoulder than sat heavily “There we go then,” I saw with a shrug. and with you loving in the annex, Jake back for about 7 in time for bed.” squeaked, staring at my with wild eyes. shower together, I Tammy started getting Well, I suppose it can do, nhaled deeply then slowed exhaled. “How hang on a minute!”

PLRus--Founding member of the TSM F5 club.

Have a feeling that Ms. Marant is someone's great great great grandaughter. ;)

I'm only half way through, and I won't have time to finish it tonight. It's well written, but I confess to being very frustrated with the emotions and reactions of Mr. perfect.. At first I was all with him, it was time for fire, blood and vengeance. Then...well I don't want to throw out spoilers here, but there are some basic logic fails here that "business consultants" and "high powered business women" don't generally make. I'm just finding it unrealistic in enough aspects, that I'm having trouble sticking with it. Maybe the second half will turn me around.

For me this story hit close to home in some aspects. It was an emotional rollercoaster for sure and had me on edge from begining to end. Breaking away from TSM for this story just proves your talents as a writter. The qualities I respect and love in your characters in TSM transfer to this story as well. You are extremley talented writter that draws the reader into your characters and makes you want only good things for them. "So the good guys get to win in the end" ( not an exact quote lol). Thankyou for sharing this story with us.

Robert Hawk

"Loving wives" is not normally my cuppa, but much like the zombie apocalypse genre, if the author is one that I trust, I'll give it a go. Liked it a lot! Well written and went a couple of places I didn't exactly expect, which was good. When the Muse insists, the smart author says "Yes, ma'am!" and writes that story, regardless. That it helps stop burnout is a solid bonus.

Damn Tefler. I loved this story. I actually left bad for Matt and Stephanie. I was starting to think you could only write about lasers and missiles. You definitely showed you can write at a high level in different genre. Congrats

Anthony Kester

Thank you! It's very different writing first person to third, and the genre switch makes a huge difference.

Tefler

Thank you kindly! It's quite a departure from TSM with very different emotions, so it was a fun challenge!

Tefler

Thanks! I fixed that now.

Tefler

Yeah the good doctor was just a red herring that I threw in to distract from the nanny. I didn't want to make it too obvious that they'd get together at the start. Good point on the knock-on effect with TSM. I hadn't really thought about that, but it's almost certainly true. :-)

Tefler

;-)

Tefler

Holy Crap. That was good.

Robert Barr

Well done showing an great author can do other subjects with strong & superb story ... I found it very well laid out, good character development. but I find the outcome a little unlikely - hell though it's fiction right? - I do love me a good RAAC story (unlike many LW readers). Just shows honest love and sunlight is the only way to save the day every time.

Well, I just finished reading this and I consider it, as do many other commenters listed above, to have been very well thought out, written, and presented. I'm glad it helped you relax and that it was NOT from personal experience....... Good Job my friend....

Well done for having the guts to embrace a different style of genre and writing.

Wookey

When i downloaded the story this morning i had plans. Those went to pot when i started reading this. Not my usual read but after 100 chapters of TSM and 2 stand alone stories i really shouldnt of been surprised by how good it was. Top marks as usual Tefler

Maiesiophilia at its best!

Thanks, I enjoyed my brief drink before going back to the grindstone. :-)

Tefler

No thank God, it's not from personal experience. :-) I hope you like the ending!

Tefler

Tefler, I liked it because it was different than most of the other. Thanks. I did notice one sentence that I think needs changing. It reads “How hang on a minute!”. I think it should be “Now hang on a minute!”

Cignal

Just downloaded and read it today. Good read. Nice story. I really expected the Dr to jump in toward the end lol. And honestly I think you've been so enraptured with the end game of TSM and the babies babies everywhere bit that you were worried it would distract from the rest of the story. In reality I think this was an exercise to work out some of that in your mind as well as scratch the impregnated lovers bit all in one. Now you can go back and refocus on your plot and progressing TSM as it was meant to be without the need to focus on breeding fantasies so much. ;) not that it is a bad thing.

Grimlakin

Very thorough story, interesting dynamic, and enjoyable read. You definitely didn't skimp on the details, most scenes playing out well as a developed image. Its almost impossible to believe, this was thrown together in a week... It was definitly overtime time well spent. 😃

Top notch story Tefler!, half way through it, but just had to say its an impressive story, i can see why you needed to get it written down, at least to get it out of your system. Just hope this is not from personal experience...

Yeah, there's a bit of emotional negativity in this one. Hard to read at times.

James Hârn

Doesn't really sound like my cup of tea, so I think I will pass on this one. All power to you though, and I'm glad you are enjoying writing something different alongside TSM. Looking forward to 101.

Eric Arthur Blair

As long as its a harem an it has a redhead I know it will be a fun story, specially it you write it.

Thanks a lot Joe! I didn't want to trudge on with 101 if my heart wasn't in it, so this seemed like a better solution. :-)

Tefler

Thanks Kim, I'm really glad you enjoyed it. I got one mention of laser cannons in there. ;-)

Tefler

It's basically a literotica genre where the wife has sex with someone other than her husband. The comments become a warzone, because there's actually three subsets of fans who share the category. They are: 1) Willing/unwilling cuckold fans. 2) Those who like reconciliation (forgiveness for the wife) 3) BtB fans (Burn the bitch) where the husband gets his revenge against the wife and lover.

Tefler

Yeah I know what you mean. Usually the wife is very regretful and apologetic when she gets caught cheating, but never makes any real effort to atone for what she did. I thought I'd see if I could write something a bit different. :-)

Tefler

Tefler, I really loved the story. I have read many stories in the loving wives category but yours is the first in which the wife is desperately trying to win her husband back. The witty replies and banter was very well written. Explore other categories as well, if you feel like it!

Thanks for the Tefler haven't read it yet but I will when I get some time. Also curious what exactly is the "Loving Wives" genre never read anything from it.

Zacle

Tefler: I haven't read the story yet, but I want to support you to freely explore. I already know I like your work, I just want to see you sustainably doing it. I've upped myself another tier to put my money where my mouth is. Managing burnout is critical for long term authors. Thanks for recognizing it and finding a way to deal with it that also rewards your fans.

Chef Marco

Hi Tef. Thanks for the bonus story - amazing for just one week of work. I really enjoyed the story once I got over the missing laser cannons and FTL spaceships. As always you nurture your charactes and make them come alive. This was an unexpected bonus and I really do not understand how this could upset anybody. Why don’t you make a quick ebook out of it? You may actually make some income out if it from readers who get to know you through the TSM universe.

Kim Biel-Nielsen

Cheers Byroz! Yeah, I was a bit confused by that reaction. I could understand someone getting pissed off if I'd charged them for it, but it was just a bonus story. It's helpful to be able to free my mind of other story ideas, because they're too distracting otherwise. Truckstop takedown was like that too. As soon as I got it done, then it's out the way and I can get back to focusing on TSM without other story ideas distracting me. :-)

Tefler

I'm really glad you liked it! :-) It was nice to just be able to write a complete story, with only a few subplots in it! TSM is hugely more complex, so it was a very refreshing change. When I'm done with the sequel, I think I'll definitely try a bunch of standalone short stories, maybe starting with one in the same setting as Truckstop Takedown.

Tefler

Just finished reading, excellent story as always. Also, as others have said ignore anyone getting annoyed at you doing something not 3SM related, everyone deserves time off, and unlike a normal vacation we got a fantastic story out of it, seems like a win for us really!

Byroz

Awww Tef, that was lovely! I’m an old softy so it really pulled at the heart strings and it’s just as well that I couldn’t get hold of Matt becasue there were times I would’ve banged his head on something! Loved the ending (it felt as though it was headed this way, but that didn’t in any way lessen the pleasure of it). Congratulations on your versatility, what will you do next, sonnets??!! BTW, don’t worry over the occasional strange mail you may get in these columns like the guy who wanted to quit or whatever it was. 3SM has been so wildly popular on Patreon that by the law of averages you’ll get some rather odd types caught up in the dragnet, as it were. ..... Cheers Tim

Timbo

Thank you Tefler, I look forward to reading this for the change of pace I think I need. I'm glad you took the time to recharge, don't worry most of your base is with you and we will support anything to keep the muses flowing.

Hats of to your creative abilities, Looking forward to reading this story also. Could you give us a likely timeline for ch 101 ?? That really has on tenterhooks....

bob lakhanpal

Thank you Tefler, I cant wait to dive in! Crazy to think how much Ch. 100 took out of you (Well with such a choreographed battle over 28 pages, its not surprising!). Really looking forward to reading something that has so obviously inspired and rejuvenated you. Thanks again!

Damn, some people need a chill pill.

Matthew Murphy

I'm working on it at the moment. Some time in early April I suspect, it depends on how much progress I make for the rest of the week. :-) If I can average 6k a day, I can get it done by the 31st...

Tefler

Any idea when ch101 will be out? 😁

Thanks, I fixed it. :-)

Tefler

Seems you found out. Good luck to you too...

Heinz Molck

I would like to 'free up' some more of your time by saying good luck, and good bye.

Still reading - very different from TSM. Found a typo: “I saw with a ...” should be “I said with a ...”.

Kim Biel-Nielsen

Why you nice man! How thoughtful! Thank you. Now have one adult beverage and get back to work.

Thanks for the new story. And thank you for forcing my lazy American ass to finally learn the metric system. ;)

Wow you read all that in an hour! :-) Glad you thought it was good. It was interesting to write something different.

Tefler

Reading a BTB-esque story from you is a bit different. Even though it didnt go where i thought it would be, it is a bit weird reading it. Still, a good story. Thanks Tefler.

Sharil a.k.a. Memeranglaut

You're welcome. :-)

Tefler

You're welcome, I home you enjoy it! <a href="https://patreon.zendesk.com/hc/en-us/articles/115002804683-How-do-I-edit-my-Pledge-" rel="nofollow noopener" target="_blank">https://patreon.zendesk.com/hc/en-us/articles/115002804683-How-do-I-edit-my-Pledge-</a>

Tefler

Thanks for the new story

wildcat 1986

Thank you Tefler. How can I increase my pledge fo a single chapter? Any hint is appreciated.