Fateful vacation Part 22
Added 2023-04-14 09:05:33 +0000 UTCHey there! Here is the next part, it seems Ashley is finally becoming who she's meant to beπ And if you guys see any mistakes you can freely point them out in comments, that's a lot of pages so I could miss something.
Comments
Wow, what a night Ashley had! The art is splendid as always and I love seeing Ashley get completely lost in her mantra. Almost makes you think she really wanted this all along π
Annabel
2023-04-14 23:04:11 +0000 UTCGenial!! ππ eres increΓble me encanta, sigue un poco masπππ
jam
2023-04-14 21:58:14 +0000 UTCLove this series. Please continue it!!!
DJ
2023-04-14 19:04:06 +0000 UTCOf course there will be more
LilTKit
2023-04-14 15:18:25 +0000 UTCWill there be more to this story or is this the end. Btw really love your art style.
Otl
2023-04-14 14:15:46 +0000 UTCThank you for creating and posting. Love her look and love that she swallows.
Mike R Pen
2023-04-14 14:00:24 +0000 UTCwhat a chapter !!! i love your style, stories super happy to be supporting your work! !
AurΓ©lie Trave
2023-04-14 13:59:47 +0000 UTCOk, I'll start working on corrections for the previous parts. And don't be too hard on yourself. The dialogue is still easy to understand and you're much better at English than I would be at any second language. ;)
Solaufein
2023-04-14 13:57:03 +0000 UTCYep, thank you, it really helps a lot. There're so many of them, I guess my English is still far from decent levelπ . Yes, if you can check all the parts I'd be only glad, the story is coming to an end so it's right time to fix all the mistakes
LilTKit
2023-04-14 13:47:21 +0000 UTCLove this comic so far, and this chapter was great! Since you asked for mistakes to be pointed out, I put this together: https://www.diffchecker.com/uCtxEXWx/ Original text is in orange on the left, corrections in green on the right. Would you be interested in more of this type of feedback? I'd be willing to go back and do it for parts 1 through 21 if it would help.
Solaufein
2023-04-14 13:28:00 +0000 UTCYep, it's the same long mantra aunty taught her before the date
LilTKit
2023-04-14 10:36:50 +0000 UTCI think Tommy wouldn't be glad to hear thatπ
LilTKit
2023-04-14 10:35:23 +0000 UTCYes yes I saw that no worries! Do you mean to say it is the same mantra she's repeating? She mentions a mantra twice, and it seems like the first one somehow gets turned into the second one.
Virtua2nsanity
2023-04-14 10:32:59 +0000 UTCThe mantra is not that short, you can notice that she's repeating pieces of it through a few pages
LilTKit
2023-04-14 10:32:27 +0000 UTCShe thinks "I love being Tommy's gf....etc" but before that, the mantra is "my name is ashley...etc"
Virtua2nsanity
2023-04-14 10:30:11 +0000 UTCIt could be so fun to add something with ashley and her ex-girlfriend to find out that she was looking for him but couldn't find him. That could be a shock for both of them. Then we could show that ashley can't fight her new nature even if she try, and we could discover that everything had been planned since the beginning by ashley's ennemy when she was still a man, to take ashley's girlfriend for him/her. Then this Guy could keep ashley as a fuck toy and make his/her ex-girlfriend pregnant. That could be fun π.
Bjorn
2023-04-14 10:29:23 +0000 UTCWhat do you mean?
LilTKit
2023-04-14 10:23:54 +0000 UTCMmmh, I don't understand why she gets the mantra wrong ? Also there are some mistakes in the bubbles, otherwise, great!
Virtua2nsanity
2023-04-14 10:22:04 +0000 UTCWhew!π₯΅
Lebruh-
2023-04-14 09:31:37 +0000 UTC
